My comments...1st 10 poems
Confesion for my love
Comment By: Bob Archell on March 16, 2004 04:53:26 AM Report
A personal, but a happy and optomistic love poem. They are the best kind! Nice piece, the style is familiar to me for some reason.
Comment By: Jessique on March 3, 2004 05:08:06 AM Report
Very beautiful tribute.
He can thank his lucky stars that he has you.
Jessique
Comment By: Rajalaxmi Vasudevan on February 8, 2004 03:35:21 so deep!!!hope u unite soon..
Comment By: wislar on February 7, 2004 01:45:31
very touching words of love to your lady.
wislar
Missing you each day each night
Comment By: Dawud on December 11, 2004 11:32:59
Beautifully write, such passion you can feel the warmth.
I am sure your love will send infinite ripples through time.
Dawud.
Comment By: INDIA on February 19, 2004 03:12:58 AM Report
WHAT LOVE YOU HAVE IN YOUR HEART A FLAME THAT BURNES??? INDIA-SHE
I Thought About You
Comment By: James.A on March 19, 2004 10:54:20
Love to read the passion
Comment By: INDIA on February 19, 2004 03:14:21
BEAUTIFUL...BEAUTIFUL ..LADY WHAT LOVE AND PASSION IN YOUR MIND AND HEART...INDIA-SHE
My First Love Mail.....
Comment By: INDIA on February 19, 2004 03:16:29 AM
WOW ... THIS I S MOVING THE LOVE THAT FLOWS...INDIA
my world
Comment By: Candace on March 9, 2004 06:02:55 AM Report
very nice
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Comment By: SouthernStar on December 31, 1969 07:00:00 PM
This is just wonderful.You have lots of talent.
The war is over .........is it really?
Comment By: Paul Peter McLean on May 16, 2004 08:00:58 AM Report
Very good poem Lubaina. It shows the devastating effect of war on real, ordinary people. Things would be better if countries were allowed to sort their own problems out, instead of other, bigger countries getting involved just because they have the military power, or because there is an election on the horizon.
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Comment By: Paul Russell on March 1, 2004 12:50:18 PM Report
I could say that this poem tells to me nothing I've not found elsewhere, but the horrors of war ring true and are as resonant as they have always been. The line in the "about the poem" section that says "It's sad to know why we all fight when we all have enough of everything" I don't agree here, some don't even have the basic neccessities and Man's greed or modesty is the only thing that defines something as being too much or too little. That said this poem is a commendable ode to your Uncles lament. In terms of future improvement, I suggest you draw the reader in with ever more descriptive insights into a condition or feeling etc with metaphors and imagery and all the other tools a poet has at his/her disposal.
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Comment By: Megan Catherine on March 1, 2004 12:45:38 PM Report
Very sad. Quite touching.
Meg
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Comment By: ReBeL CuTiE on March 1, 2004 02:25:57 AM Report
Once again a very truthful write~
I am left speechless~
Can only find the words to say~
VERY WELL DONE~
~KELLY~
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Comment By: Mary Charest on February 11, 2004 09:31:04 PM Report
This is so sad it leaves me speechless. There are no real winners in war. Very touching write.
Mary
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Comment By: Darkness Rides This Night on February 8, 2004 02:36:40 PM Report
My nation is most guilty of this..! it makes me ashamed sometimes..! Your right..! the world has plenty..! Plenty for all to share and live in peace..! I just wish we could..!
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Comment By: Anya den Teuling on December 31, 2004 07:00:00 PM Report
I am sorry ..My country is guilty
Little Minds ...Big War.....
Comment By: Bob Archell on March 16, 2004 05:00:25 AM Report
Good sentiments, not sure about the use of "W/no hopes to hope" overall a good poem about a difficult subject
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Comment By: ReBeL CuTiE on March 1, 2004 02:24:05 AM Report
I agree with Mary~
Lets not give up on peace~
But your write is very true and deeply expressed~
Well done~
~KELLY~
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Comment By: Candace on February 29, 2004 10:27:01 PM Report
very strong poem
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Comment By: Timespell on February 27, 2004 01:52:19 PM Report
Powerful write lubaina~
And your words are speaking only but the truth!!
Well written and well said!!
:O)
~Timespell~
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Comment By: Mary Charest on February 9, 2004 01:28:08 PM Report
Let us not give up hope that peace will come. Nice write.
Mary
War A Three Letter Word
Comment By: Katy on February 20, 2005 11:30:14 PM Report
you did a good job
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Comment By: Amy on April 26, 2004 03:40:43 PM Report
"the pen is mightier than the sword." If more people believed in peace as you do, the world would be brighter place. Thanks for the write.
Amy
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Comment By: Robert Frondle on March 16, 2004 07:37:47 AM Report
your sincerity shines forth in your words
peace to you
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Comment By: carlos stephens on February 28, 2004 02:59:14 AM Report
ah! captured perfectly
to perfection Lubaina,
very nice write. carlos
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Comment By: Laddee Li on February 9, 2004 05:07:42 AM Report
this is very good!!!!!! and yup this is true!!!! :>
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Comment By: wislar on February 9, 2004 04:02:56 AM Report
Nice write Lubaina
wislar
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Comment By: Lena on December 31, 1969 07:00:00 PM Report
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